QUERY PACKAGE SUPPORT FOR THE WRITER WITH 30 QUERIES OUT AND A NAGGING FEELING SOMETHING’S OFF
The “Stop Overthinking Your Query” Sale
Whether you’re gearing up to query for the first time, stuck in revision hell after a wave of rejections, or just need a professional gut check before you hit send, I’m opening up sub package support to help you get agent-ready.
Normally I only offer query and first chapter feedback inside my coaching containers, but for a limited time, I’m opening up these critiques without the big commitment.
How It Works:
Choose your package below to lock in your discounted rate. There are 10 spots available per service.
Take your time writing your materials. You have until January 1, 2027 to redeem.
Once you submit, you'll receive your critique within 2 weeks.
Your query gets them interested. Your first chapter seals the deal.
Your opening pages are doing a lot of heavy lifting. They have to carry your voice, your tone, your world, all while convincing someone they’re in good hands.
You’ll receive a professional edit on your novel’s first chapter, with thoughtful in-line comments focused on clarity, emotional impact, and narrative momentum. I'll offer feedback on how the chapter reads and ensure it hooks the reader from page one.
You’ll receive:
In-line comments and edits on your first chapter.
Suggestions for sharpening tension, voice, and worldbuilding early on.
A guaranteed 2-week turnaround from the date you submit your materials to me.
This is for you if:
You’ve got a solid query, but your pages aren’t landing the way you want them to.
You want to make sure your opening hooks an agent immediately.
You’re tired of vague critique and want honest, actionable insight from someone who knows what makes agents keep reading.
Please note that all materials must be submitted and your package redeemed by January 1, 2027.
You’ll receive everything you need to confidently pitch your story, with the safety net of expert feedback before you hit send.
Normally, I only offer query support inside high-touch coaching containers. But I’m opening up this rare, one-off opportunity to get professional feedback without the big package commitment.
You’ll receive:
A professional edit that doesn’t flatten your voice or make you play it safe.
In-line comments on your query letter for clarity, structure, and emotional resonance.
A guaranteed 2-week turnaround from the date you submit your materials to me.
This is for you if:
You want to know if your query is working (or why it’s not).
You’re tired of contradictory advice and want focused feedback from someone who edits query-ready books for a living.
You don’t want to lose your voice or over-sanitize just to “follow the rules.”
Please note that your critique must be redeemed by January 1st, 2027.
Your query gets them interested. Your first chapter seals the deal.
Your opening pages are doing a lot of heavy lifting. They have to carry your voice, your tone, your world, all while convincing someone they’re in good hands.
This two-pass critique gives you professional feedback on your first chapter, space to revise, and a second round of eyes on the result. You’ll get clarity not just on what’s working or missing, but whether your revision actually lands.
This option is designed for writers who want their opening chapter to truly deliver—on voice, tension, and story promise.
You’ll receive:
In-line comments and edits on your first chapter.
Suggestions for sharpening tension, voice, and worldbuilding early on.
A guaranteed 2-week turnaround from the date you submit your materials to me.
A second round of feedback after you revise.
This is for you if:
You know your story is strong, but you’re not sure your opening’s pulling its weight.
You want clear, honest feedback you can trust, and the chance to prove you can revise.
You’re tired of getting vague passes and ready to make every page earn its place.
Please note that this must be redeemed by January 1, 2027.
Want the chance to revise your query and get another round of eyes on it? This two-pass option gives you deeper support, more clarity, and the chance to apply feedback and fine-tune your pitch before sending it out.
You'll receive thoughtful, professional feedback twice: once on your first draft and again after you've had a chance to revise. Includes in-line comments on both drafts for clarity, structure, and emotional resonance, plus short summary notes each round.
You’ll receive:
Two full rounds of professional edits on your query letter.
In-line comments and short summary notes for each round to guide your revisions.
A guaranteed 2-week turnaround time for each round after you submit your pages.
This is for you if:
You’re ready to dig deep and make your query sing (but don’t want to do it alone).
You want a second opinion after applying notes (not just a one-and-done read).
You’re gearing up to query (and want to feel unshakably confident).
Please note that this must be redeemed by January 1, 2027.
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