First Chapter Critique (Two Passes)
Your opening pages are doing a lot of heavy lifting. They have to carry your voice, your tone, your world, all while convincing someone they’re in good hands.
This two-pass critique gives you professional feedback on your first chapter, space to revise, and a second round of eyes on the result. You’ll get clarity not just on what’s working or missing, but whether your revision actually lands.
This option is designed for writers who want their opening chapter to truly deliver—on voice, tension, and story promise.
You’ll receive:
In-line comments on your first chapter
Narrative guidance based on your synopsis and query letter
Suggestions for tension, voice, and worldbuilding
A second round of feedback after you revise
Submit first pages by: August 15, 2025
Receive first critique by: September 1, 2025
Submit revised pages by: September 15, 2025
Receive final critique by: October 1, 2025
This is for you if:
You know your story is strong, but you’re not sure your opening’s pulling its weight
You want clear, honest feedback you can trust, and the chance to prove you can revise
You’re tired of getting vague passes and ready to make every page earn its place
Here’s What to Know Before Claiming Your Spot:
All critique purchases are final. No refunds will be issued once a spot is claimed. These offerings are intentionally limited and time-bound to protect both your energy and mine. Please submit materials by the listed deadlines and schedule any 1:1 strategy sessions by October 15, 2025. If you’re unable to meet the timeline, I’ll do my best to accommodate, but I can’t guarantee rescheduling after that date.
Your opening pages are doing a lot of heavy lifting. They have to carry your voice, your tone, your world, all while convincing someone they’re in good hands.
This two-pass critique gives you professional feedback on your first chapter, space to revise, and a second round of eyes on the result. You’ll get clarity not just on what’s working or missing, but whether your revision actually lands.
This option is designed for writers who want their opening chapter to truly deliver—on voice, tension, and story promise.
You’ll receive:
In-line comments on your first chapter
Narrative guidance based on your synopsis and query letter
Suggestions for tension, voice, and worldbuilding
A second round of feedback after you revise
Submit first pages by: August 15, 2025
Receive first critique by: September 1, 2025
Submit revised pages by: September 15, 2025
Receive final critique by: October 1, 2025
This is for you if:
You know your story is strong, but you’re not sure your opening’s pulling its weight
You want clear, honest feedback you can trust, and the chance to prove you can revise
You’re tired of getting vague passes and ready to make every page earn its place
Here’s What to Know Before Claiming Your Spot:
All critique purchases are final. No refunds will be issued once a spot is claimed. These offerings are intentionally limited and time-bound to protect both your energy and mine. Please submit materials by the listed deadlines and schedule any 1:1 strategy sessions by October 15, 2025. If you’re unable to meet the timeline, I’ll do my best to accommodate, but I can’t guarantee rescheduling after that date.
Your opening pages are doing a lot of heavy lifting. They have to carry your voice, your tone, your world, all while convincing someone they’re in good hands.
This two-pass critique gives you professional feedback on your first chapter, space to revise, and a second round of eyes on the result. You’ll get clarity not just on what’s working or missing, but whether your revision actually lands.
This option is designed for writers who want their opening chapter to truly deliver—on voice, tension, and story promise.
You’ll receive:
In-line comments on your first chapter
Narrative guidance based on your synopsis and query letter
Suggestions for tension, voice, and worldbuilding
A second round of feedback after you revise
Submit first pages by: August 15, 2025
Receive first critique by: September 1, 2025
Submit revised pages by: September 15, 2025
Receive final critique by: October 1, 2025
This is for you if:
You know your story is strong, but you’re not sure your opening’s pulling its weight
You want clear, honest feedback you can trust, and the chance to prove you can revise
You’re tired of getting vague passes and ready to make every page earn its place
Here’s What to Know Before Claiming Your Spot:
All critique purchases are final. No refunds will be issued once a spot is claimed. These offerings are intentionally limited and time-bound to protect both your energy and mine. Please submit materials by the listed deadlines and schedule any 1:1 strategy sessions by October 15, 2025. If you’re unable to meet the timeline, I’ll do my best to accommodate, but I can’t guarantee rescheduling after that date.