First Chapter Critique (Single Pass)
Your query gets them interested. Your first chapter seal the deal.
You’ll get a deep, professional edit on your novel’s first chapter—with thoughtful in-line comments focused on clarity, emotional impact, and narrative momentum. I’ll also take a look at your synopsis and query letter (even if it’s messy!) so I can offer feedback not just on how the chapter reads, but whether it’s even the right place to begin.
You’ll receive:
In-line comments on your first chapter
Narrative guidance on your pages based on your synopsis and query letter
Suggestions for sharpening tension, voice, and worldbuilding early
Submit your pages by: August 15, 2025
Receive your critique by: September 1, 2025
This is for you if:
You’ve got a solid query, but your pages aren’t landing the way you want them to
You want to make sure your opening matches the story you’re pitching
You’re tired of vague critique and want honest, actionable insight from someone who knows what makes agents keep reading
Here’s What to Know Before Claiming Your Spot:
All critique purchases are final. No refunds will be issued once a spot is claimed. These offerings are intentionally limited and time-bound to protect both your energy and mine. Please submit materials by the listed deadlines and schedule any 1:1 strategy sessions by October 15, 2025. If you’re unable to meet the timeline, I’ll do my best to accommodate, but I can’t guarantee rescheduling after that date.
Your query gets them interested. Your first chapter seal the deal.
You’ll get a deep, professional edit on your novel’s first chapter—with thoughtful in-line comments focused on clarity, emotional impact, and narrative momentum. I’ll also take a look at your synopsis and query letter (even if it’s messy!) so I can offer feedback not just on how the chapter reads, but whether it’s even the right place to begin.
You’ll receive:
In-line comments on your first chapter
Narrative guidance on your pages based on your synopsis and query letter
Suggestions for sharpening tension, voice, and worldbuilding early
Submit your pages by: August 15, 2025
Receive your critique by: September 1, 2025
This is for you if:
You’ve got a solid query, but your pages aren’t landing the way you want them to
You want to make sure your opening matches the story you’re pitching
You’re tired of vague critique and want honest, actionable insight from someone who knows what makes agents keep reading
Here’s What to Know Before Claiming Your Spot:
All critique purchases are final. No refunds will be issued once a spot is claimed. These offerings are intentionally limited and time-bound to protect both your energy and mine. Please submit materials by the listed deadlines and schedule any 1:1 strategy sessions by October 15, 2025. If you’re unable to meet the timeline, I’ll do my best to accommodate, but I can’t guarantee rescheduling after that date.
Your query gets them interested. Your first chapter seal the deal.
You’ll get a deep, professional edit on your novel’s first chapter—with thoughtful in-line comments focused on clarity, emotional impact, and narrative momentum. I’ll also take a look at your synopsis and query letter (even if it’s messy!) so I can offer feedback not just on how the chapter reads, but whether it’s even the right place to begin.
You’ll receive:
In-line comments on your first chapter
Narrative guidance on your pages based on your synopsis and query letter
Suggestions for sharpening tension, voice, and worldbuilding early
Submit your pages by: August 15, 2025
Receive your critique by: September 1, 2025
This is for you if:
You’ve got a solid query, but your pages aren’t landing the way you want them to
You want to make sure your opening matches the story you’re pitching
You’re tired of vague critique and want honest, actionable insight from someone who knows what makes agents keep reading
Here’s What to Know Before Claiming Your Spot:
All critique purchases are final. No refunds will be issued once a spot is claimed. These offerings are intentionally limited and time-bound to protect both your energy and mine. Please submit materials by the listed deadlines and schedule any 1:1 strategy sessions by October 15, 2025. If you’re unable to meet the timeline, I’ll do my best to accommodate, but I can’t guarantee rescheduling after that date.